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When it comes to scenes in a book, think of them as acts in a play. The curtains rise, and what's on stage? Well, if your story starts with dialogue, then there's nothing on stage but disembodied voices. This makes it quite difficult for your reader to identify with a character. After all, the reader doesn't know the gender, the appearance, anything. The phrase "It's not safe out there" has different meanings depending on whether someone is nonchalantly sitting at a desk and not paying attention, or whether they're standing next to someone, holding on for dear life. The first person could be disinterested or even trying to dissuede the character. The second cares, or at least is concerned. Try this..... "I don't think you should tell him." Amy sipped her cup of coffee. "I don't know," Abigail said. "It seems wrong somehow." She shoved her coffee cup away and turned to the window outside. Or..... Amy leaned forward across the formica topped diner table. The sounds of clattering dishes and a cook calling out orders faded into the background. Abigail's stomach churned, though she didn't know if it was from the fetus in her slightly rounded stomach, or nerves. Across from her a toddler gleefully flung bits of toast at its mother, and Abigail tried to quell the pang of envy. A waitress wearing a pink dress walked by noisily smacking gum. The smell of greasy food and strong coffee nausated Abigail. "I don't think you should tell him," Amy, her best friend since college, sipped her coffee. "I don't know. " Abigail said. "It seems wrong somehow." She turned to the windows outside where a mother pushed a stroller and cars zoomed down the road. "It just seems wrong for him not to know." Which one has more emotional punch? The second because the author gave the reader time to get immersed in the scene. And those examples are just off the top of my head so I apologize for any grammar/spelling, etc. errors. :) It's been a busy labor day for me, mostly because I've sat in front of my laptop and worked on several projects. I'm nearly half way through the sequel to Ghost Touch, and I'm pretty excited. Also about halfway through my Capricorn zodiac story for Venus Press. Hope you all had a safe Labor Day weekend.  
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